She nestled deeper in her rocking chair and closed her eyes, embracing the peace she always wanted with a tiny smile on her lips. On her way up to the 21st floor, she left behind all her sorrows, all her tears and all her troubles .This place was meant to be peaceful and shouldn’t be tainted with all the mess in her mind.
A gentle breeze ruffled her hair as she opened her eyes again to the beautiful scene before her eyes. She watched the sunset as the sun tainted the blue sky with a delicate orange color. It was a beautiful painting created by God and she got to see and enjoy such beauty form this remarkable place.
She remembered when she was a little girl afraid of heights, yet always wanted to see how little everything looks form up there, even if it scares her. She was a different person back then. She was fun, adventurous and outgoing. Her smile was always there lighting up her face, she was happy and everything around her seemed full with possibilities.
On the 21st floor balcony, she let go of her fears. She became a free spirit. It wasn’t just a beautiful spot to watch the city from the top or enjoy a beautiful view. The 21stfloor balcony was her sanctuary; it’s a place where she can be whoever she wants to be, where she can let go of the dreams she didn’t realize and dream new ones. It’s a place that brings her back to that time where everything was possible. That time when she wanted everything and much more.
She loved the time she spent away fromhe world in her own space. It was her place and her peace. She cherished sitting there in her rocking chair on the 21st floor balcony with her hopes, her dreams and her quiet mind.
This is new :). I got used to a different way of thought-narration. This one is much more exciting, with a figurative twist, inducing minds to actively conceive and forge.
ReplyDeleteI liked it, truly:). I can tell that you're emphasizing the presence of descriptive words to provide guidelines for imaginaing:). Good :).
Attempt to plant more words to spice it up. You used the concept already, so why don't you get closer :).
Loved a lot of sentences, and the metaphors you used. Interesting and soothing.
Good job, Nada :).